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Music Is…………….
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English Poetry, Oct-Nov 2011 Contest |
This lovely nature
Has its music and its rhythm
That makes you one with them
The pattering rain water
Has its drops sounding aloud
In a rhythmic tune
The flowing water
Over the hard rocks
That is a water-fall in its birth
Is a lovely music
And a lovely sight
For any being upon this earth
When the cuckoo greets at twilight
Before dawn, it hums and sings
And composes a song
That is the pleasure of the soul
It is the signature music
Put forthright
By a bard or a composer
The bees, when they hum
And visit the nectarine flowers
In the gardens and in the parks
As they prepare their honey
That is sweet to the tongue
It is the music that rouses the soul
When the lighening strikes the sky
And the sky roars with thunder
It is the music of a different kind
More like a hard rock
In the making
For a listener of a different kind
Music is …..
The very soul of nature
The very spirit of man
The very depth of the mind
Nice poem about music everywhere
A pleasure to read & in silence hear
Very effective efforts Apurva Bharat!!
Apurva,
Fine thoughts.
Truly Natutre is a great teacher in all aspects of life
Kusum
A beautiful poem that
tells music is every where.
Thank you all for your comments and appreciation.
music is the depth of mind….wow!
music is beautiful..and everywhere..awesome..:)
Apurva,
well expressed thought. Some fine ideas. Music in the abstract, harmony with nature, man and the divine.
The more I read this the better I liked it.
“…….honey
That is sweet to the tongue
It is the music that rouses the soul” – good image as fragrances and taste are sometimes said to have notes within them.
There is, for me, some word repetition that could be avoided. Some suggestions are given below:
“The pattering rain (water – I would delete)
……
In a (rhythmic – I would use melodic) tune”
“That is a (water-fall – I would use /cascade/ to avoid repetition) in its birth”
“And (composes – I would use /creates/ here) a song
……….
By a bard or a composer”
@Gion Gion, Thanks for your suggestions Gion Gion.
Although they are quite good and thoughtful yet I would stick with what I have penned.
I prefer using rain water instead of rain, I feel rhythmic is better than melodic, composes sounds better than creates,
cascade has more to do with windows operating systems or may be used for a drape of curtain, so I stick with water-fall.
Honey……………
good image as fragrances and taste are sometimes said to have notes within them.
I am not referring to the fragrance or taste here but the humming of the bees that rouses the soul.