I am water
Sometimes solid...you can always depend on
Sometimes liquid...fits in anywhere
Sometimes vapor...ephemeral...I am there and then I am gone
Sometimes ice...but can be dissolved by fire
Sometimes swirling ....with passion
Sometimes tranquil ....with still desire
Always flowing....unaware of the destination
Sometimes vivid ....like blue sapphire
Always pure....see your reflection
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Crowned Poem, English Poetry |
Weave me into you
You, the warp and I, the weft
In between, no space left
If anyone tried to tear
Will fail, because we will share
A bond
So strong
With
An amalgation of our spirits
No you
No me
Only We
Only We
nice poetry ma’am……..
super duper poem Renu, so short and so sweet all said in it. I lvoe the expression really sweet 🙂
Sweet, startling & splendid, all woven together,
Is how you have written this poem here.
Great.
for me the thought is good (common though) but the flow doesnt go very well, with the line stating ‘amalgamation’ comes as a force fit.
Hi Hozefa- Welcome to p4poetry- would love to read your works as well.You are the 1st one who has said that the poem’s flow is not good-but there is always a 1st one 🙂
waaaw….superb. 🙂
Boss, mast hein….
first 3 lines are like any great hindi movie song….very special……they make you remember and recite “n” number of times….
Weave me into you
You, the warp and I, the weft
In between, no space left
These first 3 lines, even Shakes-peer ko bhi shake kar diya….
I like these 3 lines….SIMPLY GREAT….
5 stars……..I have woven these 3 lines in memory….
Thanks Ulhas- I am honored- I know that 5 stars rating is very rare for you 🙂
awesum…the poem is great as a whole.
Though simple and short,
you have played magic
with words.Beautiful indeed.
Thanks Shalu,Nishant,vishvnandji,Vikash,shreyansh and medhini
dear renu
very nicely written,i think you are superb poesy and a great lady of our future India.
the style and flow is very good.
regards
rajdeep bhattacharya
THE POEM AND U HAVE COME AS FRESH FRAGRANCE AFTER VACATION.
superb! so short and apt. But very intense. Goes like a song.
very passionate poem
beautiful
short but very effective
Passionate and intense…
I envy the way you pour your thoughts out…
Loved it thoroughly…
a real treat!laconic, intense poesy flowing at the brim.
congratulations!