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Oh Mom

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Anthology 2013 Entries, Crowned Poem, English Poetry

( 10th May, we all celebrated Mother’s day, we all have seen our mother.
Yet a few unfortunate, never ever knew a mother. This is a poetry written
for such an unfotrtunate one who never met his/her mother)

Did you ever think of me
Did I even cross your mind
I’ve never seen or known a mother
Yet I too belong to mankind

Why she left me in a dustbin
Don’t know what was my crime
The umbilical cord she ripped
My tears mixing with the grime

Mother’s love I yearned
Her cozy lap I did miss
That gentle touch of love
The warmth of her gentle kiss

No, I don’t seek pity
My only wish, I too could
Celebrate like the rest of you
Wish my broken heart understood

Do spare a thought for us
For us, the less fortunate
Value everything God’s given
Everything that’s in your fate.

30 Comments

  1. vartika says:

    “No, I don’t seek pity
    My only wish, I too could
    Celebrate like the rest of you
    Wish my broken heart understood”

    really touching lines….
    a beautiful poem with a really noble thought… thanks for giving us an extra reason to cherish and treasure more wat we have been blessed with….

    • viju says:

      @vartika,

      Felt so bad 4 the unfortunate few who dont even know who their mother was..ever.

      2 reasons – my nephew from canada had just adopted a child & the boy, from Gujarat, was with us for a day, just felt his emotions & how he just adapted 2 the new family, just because the childs mind is clean.

      – regularly help out at an orphanage, called Adhar Kendra, near our house…can feel the pain in a child who has none of his own, no mother 2 look up 2 🙁

  2. medhini says:

    A nice poem, filled with emotions.
    This poem is an earnest plea to all,
    to feel for the unfortunate, abandoned
    children. A very sorry state of affairs.

  3. Vishvnand says:

    Very sensible, very sensitive,
    intense emotional impact,
    the poem bringing out,
    some very touching facts,
    For all to feel and really act….
    Viju, thanks for sharing this beautiful, meaningful poem

  4. rajdeep says:

    very touching
    oh MOM
    thou art in the center of my heart
    i love thee
    o!mom

  5. parminder says:

    No, what we have, we don’t cherish, and this should make us treasure the loves around most of us. Very sensitively presented. And I wish there were more of us added in such noble causes. All the best to those children!! And 3 cheers to the ones coming forward!!!

  6. ULHAS says:

    Nice………………a Mother’s poem with a difference………………hmmmmmmm………..message is good…………no doubt…………

    Poetically which really matters………………the poem uses simple language and simplicity all over……………but I thought its too simple and elementary………..bu efforts were seen to present it nicely…………

    hmmmmmmmmmmmmm Stars = 4 (-1 because of too much of simplicity and use of words very elementary)

    But overall…………..its a nice poem with a nice message………………..

    🙂

  7. Vandana Singh Mishra says:

    Very sensitive thoughts and a very emotional touch there…touches the heart really.

  8. Bee says:

    Its truly a great thing… to be able to feel other peoples pain and understand their feelings. This, when people can barely even spare a thought for others these days..

  9. krishna says:

    Painful, sad and beautiful…
    very beautifully expressed…

  10. sneha says:

    i’ll quote d same words as vishvnand….. n praises fr his way of expression as well….
    “Very sensible, very sensitive,
    intense emotional impact,
    the poem bringing out,
    some very touching facts,
    For all to feel and really act….
    Viju, thanks for sharing this beautiful, meaningful poem……..”

    n here i guess d messege is v.clear …. dat we ought to focusmore on d action part……
    n a v.good answer given by u viju on ulhas’ comment…. lol…..
    i guess its more dificult to write a simple poem wid such a profound message….. it reminded me of alchemist….. so simple but so profound …..lol
    keep d gud work going…..

  11. viju says:

    Thx. Sneha :))

    its comments like these, Vishwanand sirs, Ulhas’s n urs that motivate n also stimulate d little brain i have in2 replying wid a bit of wit n learning at the same time.

    anything, written n someone feels like reading it again…that an achievement

    wud appreciate ur comments on other poems 2 🙂

  12. Dipika Syngai says:

    wow, this poem is very real! sometimes all of us who have mothers, take her for granted and do not see the little things she does to keep us happy ): your poem made me appreciate about my mom more :D.

    and very nice flow of rhymes & words were appropriately chosen. liked it!

    5 stars

    • viju says:

      @Dipika Syngai,

      Thx. dipika,
      yes it is indeed sad that most of us, well almost all of us never count our blessings & generally just crib @ d small irritants of life. Yes, 2 a child who does not know or has never seen his mothers love, we, d fortunate ones cannot imagine , yet take our relationship 4 granted.
      This was an attempt 2 just highlight a mother, the next best thing 2 God, tho” who has seen God??

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