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Doha – Sun/Son

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Prelates exposed to torment those thought with glory to invest the Sun,

Disclosed no torments aiding those who of glory do divest the Son.

4 Comments

  1. rajdeep says:

    gud one

  2. Vishvnand says:

    Liked it. A nice attempt at a couplet in “Doha” style.
    But feel that it needs to be made simpler for excellence.

    • Gion Gion says:

      @Vishvnand,
      Thanks for the advice Vishvnand.
      I think this is as far as I can simplify this piece and it still be understood.
      2 rhyming couplets of 18 syllables and 2 concepts unified in 1 history.
      I hope this is an improvement to the English attempt of a Doha/Dohaa style,
      Gion

  3. medhini says:

    A nice one, Gion. Liked it.

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