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English Poetry |
The white paper is sure dumb,
open to words and verses,
on its own its plain and mum,
only to a pen it converses.
The papers held in my hand, stacked a file,
I took them around, walked the streets,
and across the river side, I sat for a while,
though still as blank those sheets.
White papers are sure dull and dumb,
they don’t feel the breeze across the shore,
nor the cuckoos pleasant rhyming hum,
nor the silence of dark, when left in the drawer.
They hint nothing, no emotions they show
how could they, for they feel nothing,
even if I scatter open and want them to know
pages with nothing, those pages don’t mean.
This is what I gazed into the white page,
when writing a verse, putting my fervor,
my thoughts on its void stage,
as passionate, to cast, myself in pour.
Passionate is me, as any, who writes,
the verses and the rhymes, I paint over,
barrens thus breath and the emotion excites,
the white page alive, I spur.
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This is a contest poem
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Thougtful and wise.Nice one.!!
Ukhas,
a good one. Well rhymed. A fairly natural flow of language.
A good idea to contrast the passion for writing, creating with inert, blank, lifeless, featureless white paper.
1) “what them to know” – should this read “want” ? I don’t understand as is.
2) “emotions excites” – change to “excite”.
Fergus
well done sir!!!!!!
what a piece you have written ,,,,really marvellous!!!!!!!!
rhyming is also perfect
htas off to you sir for such a sheer novelity thinking
take care sir
Enticing & delightful thought,
running through the beautiful poem in its entirety..
Liked immensely
Kanchana, Gion, Subodh, Vishvanandji thanks for the comments. Gion thanks for showing the corrections too……
🙂
A good piece of writing indeed ! Pleasant to recite or read !
What about “excites” or “excite”, may please review, as suggested
by Gion ?
Sir,
Earlier it was “emotions excites”…which Gion felt was wrong, so I corrected that to “emotion excites”……..do you think its still wrong…..if so please suggest…..thanks in advance….
Nice one, but I think it should be “gazed at’ or “gazed into ” in place of “gazed in” because gaze is followed by at, into, on, upon etc. but not by in. Hope you don’t mind. Pl correct me if I am wrong.
@U.M.Sahai,
Corrections made………………and thanks for the comments and the time you spend on the poem…..I really appreciate the same.
Ulhas,
a beautiful poem! congrats!
@rachana,
Thanks Rachna……..
Beautiful poem, Ulhasji.