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January 28, 2011 (2:50 pm)

Crowned Poem, English Poetry

8 Comments

1. purabi says:

   28 January, 2011 at 5:11 pm

   love the way it ended while it began with dark imageries.some lines are exceptionally well written while few(no offence meant) needed a little working. u write real well,u have raised your bars yourself, thus the expectation.

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   • Hitesh says:

     29 January, 2011 at 9:02 am

     Thanks for ur appreciation nd sry fr any disappointment. I’ll try my best to meet d expectations next tym 🙂

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2. medhini says:

   28 January, 2011 at 11:26 pm

   A nice poem, well written, Hitesh.

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   • Hitesh says:

     29 January, 2011 at 9:02 am

     Thanks a lot ma’am

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3. Gion Gion says:

   29 January, 2011 at 1:16 am

   Hitesh,
   very expressive. Great mood created. Strong conclusion to the poem.
   Gion
   I have one or two suggestions –
   “..commiserate
   With…”

   ” and its struggle for survival
   beneath the (arching, weighing, cloying, depressing)
   canopy of dullness” – I feel dull / dullness is a repetition here that detracts from the lines.

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   • Hitesh says:

     29 January, 2011 at 9:10 am

     Thanks Sir for the appreciation and the suggestions. I hav incorporated them.
     Just to clarify I repeated dull with dullness jst to attempt in amplifying the effect of the word while imagining, that’s all. Nevertheless, thanks a lot for your comments, Sir

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4. bhupesh gupta says:

   20 April, 2013 at 5:26 pm

   Beauitifully written!

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   • Hitesh says:

     15 September, 2013 at 11:17 am

     thanks

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