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MOTHER
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Crowned Poem, English Poetry, Feb 2011 Contest |
An evening in the park,
it was twilight before dark;
I sat on the grass
A cool breeze was blowing through my hair
endearing aroma of roses was spread everywhere.
Twitter of home going birds
seemed like goodbye words.
The sky was shifting shades
The glow had begun to fade
Still there was a faint light.
In this beautiful region
My eyes fell on a pigeon
Who flew away, drawing my attention
To a mother
who had a baby in her lap.
Seeing her playing with her baby,
I was lost in a reverie…..
Something touched my heart,
It was neither the mother
nor the child’s art.
It was my love for my mother,
just me and her, and, no other!
All my childhood memories flashed
before my eyes in a second.
Everything she spoke to me,
her serving me biscuits with tea.
Each emotion shared with her,
I began to remember.
I closely felt her face,
her lovely eyes looking at me with grace.
The smile on her lips,
Seemed so real,
In the snow cold weather
when she hid me in her veil
and told me stories, of bygone lands and wizards
angels, prophets and seraphs.
She made my dreams wonderful
But her nights were spent in my frets.
She woke with me in exam time,
and her love still showers like sun shine.
But why do I now see the clouds
and my clothes are wet?
Only my heart is damp in reminiscence.
Oh it’s the drizzle
That smashed my vision.
So pretty were the memories
that time passed hastily.
Its dearly dark
There’s the lightning spark.
Both in the sky and in my heart.
Shelter may protect me from wetness,
But my heart is still damp in lovely bliss.
“I began to remember.” -this line is like a hinge in the poem opening a door onto what are not merely scenes but the feelings that animated them and enliven the recall,
Gion
@Gion Gion, Thank you sir,
I highly appreciate your comments………. Kindly suggest me how to improve my poetry skills…..
@cathy,
Cathy,
I’m no teacher or literature expert.
You have made a good start and your power of expression will carry you onwards,
Gion
Very lovely and beautiful poem indeed.
Liked very much the narration of feelings, the flow & style of penning
Commends for the poem. Keep it up.
Please also read poems of other authors being posted here, give invariably the read poems your rating as per the 5 star rating format, and also your comments if & when you like to comment. These you would realize are also important aspects of sharing & participating at our p4p site….
Mother’s love portrayed in the best way …. touchy poem.
Cathy
Very sensitively expressed poem. Nostalgic sentiments. Fine evocative images. Touching the heart cords.
Kusum gokarn
@kusumgokarn, thanx kusum!!!