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As I ripped my hair off my head
As I tore my clothes in disdain,
She stood smiling under a tree;
Lit a cold cigarette.
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English Poetry |
As I ripped my hair off my head
As I tore my clothes in disdain,
She stood smiling under a tree;
Lit a cold cigarette.
Saurabh,
good use of familiar imagery.
The angry rending of the veil of the second line linking to a veil of smoke in the fourth that cannot conceal that smile.
The contrast of fire- “lit” with “cold” is nice.
Gion
@Gion Gion,
This was the result one of the strongest sado-masochistic emotion that I ever felt. The smile and the cigarette bestow too much sadism upon the woman and the masochistic pleasure of penning the lines. I almost included rain in the lines that’s actually pouring in the background (under a tree, cold cigarette). It became too sadistic for my comfort.