that girl on the pink boat…
I saw her balancing on the bricks
as her little origami sailed
through the water tricks,
she gently sways and whirls around
as though she’s the sailor
rowing past the troubled surround
and up above the cloud stout
diffuse together to roar aloud,
her fear trickled inside
as she shivered projecting it outside
pleading and praying as she cried
gradually looking at the sky
drops of rain rushed as water flow,
rowing the sail all to and fro,
her little palms where now the canopy,
protecting her little crafted beauty,
“thousand miles you have to go”
she sang, a they together artfully row…
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nice creation…
liked the poem immensely
@Parespeare, thankyou for liking..:)
nicely put
Rhyming well
@rajdeep, thank you so much..
delight in details & imagining
is in this fine poem’s reading
Enjoyed very much
Hearty commends
@Vishvnand, thankyou so much for appreciating 🙂
A nice poem that brings delight, Sonal.
@medhini,
Sonal,
Nice fanciful dreamful poem that floats gracefully like an elegant boat down the rain-water.
Kusum
@medhini, thankyou so much..:)
Sonal,
a lovely narration. Vivid descriptiveness.
Catching the innocence of a child through the innocence that survives inside the adult.
“rowing the sail all to and fro,
her little palms where now the canopy,” – “where” should be (were). May I suggest that you change “rowing” to rocking?
Fergus
@Gion Gion, thank you so much…and ur suggestions are always appreciated..:)
Hi,
good one.. is there more to this poem ?
@Gaurav Gupta, no the poem end there itself..there is nothing more to it..:)