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Anthology 2013 Entries, English Poetry, Oct-Nov 2011 Contest |
*1*
Last night
Suddenly I woke up from
Samadhi….
My room was
on the verge of destruction;
Ah!
It was filled with cans of worms….
I was taken aback to see
the pallbearers
sent by Fear & Death.
They wanted to get me into
the real hot water then….
*2*
And
I poured my words
on their bag
And those
Polite words were
something like ….
“I am enjoying the music, the nectar
in my citadel”
*3*
Those
Words created curiosity
and anger in their master;
At the crack
of ‘dawn,
They came and asked ,
“You live in a hut
and speak of listening to music in a fort,
Where is your fort?”
And I put my hand on
My heart;
The greatest source of
Music
My hide!!!
©Rajdeep Bhattacharya
ohhh…. so touching sir..
very nice… !
@Ravi Rajbhar, Thanks dear….
Excellence in intense abstract muse & meaning
Is this poem brilliantly executed & entertaining
Kudos for the penning
BTW with “My Hide” you too have come out of hiding … 🙂
@Vishvnand, I am honored
nice poem Rajdeep
excellent as always…
@Parespeare, Very Thanks pal
Indeed an abstract feel,weaved so well and so terse!!The weave excels the poetry and so does the poetry…Brilliant!!!
BTW any thing specific about “stroke of midnight” that repeats..can we know ??
@kanchana, Thanks very much….
@rajdeep, Nothing so specific ’bout it.
I will not repeat it again dear ma’am.
thanks….
Amazing! Wonderfully woven in words this is truly a work of art!
@parminder, Thanks for such a sweet comment
Thanks again….
Excellent work…..
@dr.paliwal, Thanks Sir
Hi Rajdeep,
I Liked the slow built up of music being the source of a heartbeat as much as the hide. The subtle dialogue ends in an unexpected answer.. good one
sarala
@SARALA KURUP JAGAN, Thanks Ma’am
thanks for the assessment
can my words be different?a reservoir of deep thought, feeling an understanding is what the poetry holds.
good work!
@purabi, Thanks
Thanks
Thanks
Dear Sis….
Wonderful….
I liked it
@sreshtha, very very thanks….
A brilliant one, Rajdeep.
@medhini, thanks madame
really nyc sir!!!
@Hitesh, Thanks Dear
Rajdeep,
I had to google Samhdi. 😉 This seems a multi-layered poem.
Endings – life, dreams, thoughts – hoping to maintained in essence? Not wishing to conform? Music as representing a spiritual / intellectual force for individual animation?
A few minor changes suggested:
anger in their master;
music in a fort,
Where is you fort? – “art thy” seems out of place with the language of the rest of the poem,
Fergus
@Gion Gion, Thanks for the assessment , i have done with the changes.
Very thanks
Your Rajdeep
oh..i simply loved the interpretation of music…this is really awesome…:)
@sonal goswami, Thanks friend….
Excellent composition and a deep spiritual meaning. Highly inspirational. As long as the music of hope, belief and confidence is alive in the innermost citadel – the heart, no one can put a person down by threatening to destroy the exterior of this citadel, the hide.
Thanks Sangeeta