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Nuances !!!..just a few..
Anthology 2013 Entries, English Poetry, March 2012 Contest |
Between
my own
and extended kith
I oscillate
To Deftly load balance
On
Quickening
that event,long anticipated
I jubilate
To Eventually mature
For
The soulmate to grow
I giveup and bolster
I masquerade
To Completely transform
To
The glands that overrule
And govern my will
I burst
To Quietly submit
Although
my teen, gets curled up, close and tight
I relate
To Reminiscently recollect
The
“in phenomenon”
I only can relate
To Celebrate
To Eternally Celebrate
Me ??!!
A Phenomenon in me. .
©Kanchana Selvakumar.
A beauty indeed
rather a phenomenal poem difficult
to read again & again
look up meaning of uncommon words
then in front of you opens a panorama of thoughts
of beautiful nuances, everyone elegantly delights
Liked the poem immensely
Kudos
@Vishvnand, Thanks very much Vijay Sir,Your comments encourage us to write more.
Kanchana,
well a definite style in verses and poem.
Style-wise I would suggest dispensing with almost all punctuation, especially as you are using capital letters internally in lines.
In the first verse if family is intended – kin rather than kith is correct.
Below I have made minor changes to punctuation and layout.
Have a look and see what you think?
There is feeling of confidence rising from the lines through the poem. Stages, areas of life thought on frankly, as they are described. Yet there seems a hint of surprise at the realization of self’s capacity.
These quotes stand out for me:
“I oscillate;
To Deftly load balance.”
“I masquerade”
“To Eternally Celebrate;”
“On
Quickening”
Fergus
Between
my own
and extended kith/kin
I oscillate
To Deftly load balance
On
Quickening
that event, long anticipated
I jubilate
To Eventually mature
For
The soul-mate to grow
I give up and bolster
I masquerade
To Completely transform
To
The glands that overrule
And govern my will
I burst
To Quietly submit
Although
my teen
gets curled up, close and tight
I relate
To Reminiscently recollect
The
“in phenomenon”
I only can relate
To Celebrate
To Eternally Celebrate
Me??!!
A Phenomenon in me. .
@Gion Gion, Thank you Fergus Sir,I have made the suggested corrections.
@kanchana,
Kanchan,
I re-read this poem and like a bolt from the blue it’s beauty truly stroke me.
A wonderful poem,
Fergus
Kanchana,
Thought process is a bit too abstract.
I could only conjecture that each living being is a miracle by itself.
Kusum
@kusumgokarn, Thank you very much Kusum Ma’m. have sent a pm to keep the crux encapsulated.Nice to know that it got you back on memory lanes :-).
Realization of the self comes here so elegantly. Marvelous!
@parminder, Thanks very much parminderji. 🙂