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She, the wind..!
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a wind blew past me
making the trees surge wildly..
a wind that was vicious enough
to tickle chill of my spine..
that wind was harsh,
yet the sensation was calm…
yes, that wind is travelling
still over the lands afar…
she, the wind never regrets
the path she gushes into
Oh! wind tire yourself for once
and fathom the motionless terrain
but wind resume dancing
for she should not recline
the wind is meant to wind
hoisting an unending whine in silence….
Sonal,
The poem gives the vivid feel of the different moods of the wind.
How about changing ‘gush’ to ‘gushes’?
And ‘terrene’ to ‘terrain’?
Kusum
@kusumgokarn, thankyou so much for the corrections..I have done the needful..:)
Indeed a fine windy poem
Liked very much
Commends
But the mistakes pointed out by Kusum Ji have to be edited & corrected in the poem.
Rating for the poem is held up to be given only after the corrections are made 🙂
@Vishvnand, I have done the corrections waiting for your ratings now..:) 🙂
Once again, a fine stretch of imagination portrayed.
Quite a cool poem, as cool as the gentle breeze and as lightweight like a feather floating in wind.
@Aniruddha Vanage, hey Aniruddha thanks for such delighting comment…:) 🙂
Wind is an element forced by its own mightier supplement, either from the rear or from any side around – far or near –
passing casually piercing our ears, which we often get to
bear, ‘O’ Dear, just so hear ! Let me cheer with 4-stars
above here !
@ashwini kumar goswami, thank you so very much…It was delighting to hear such great compliment…:)
“Oh! wind tire yourself for once
and fathom the motionless terrain” – well expressed sentiment that touches us from time to time.
Some times we find it hard to enjoy things as they should be,
Fergus
@Gion Gion, Thank you for the comment..its always eagerly awaited.. 🙂