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English Poetry, Uncategorized

The rain pounds the window
Slumps against the glass
Seeking shelter from a
By times roaring
By times howling
Violent wind


© Copyright Fergus Carty 2013



  1. Apurva Bharat Gaglani says:

    Why leave a sentence incomplete.

    Seeking shelter from a …………….

    Did not like the poem much.

  2. Gion Gion says:

    the sentence is not incomplete. I have used line endings as informal punctuations.
    Sorry is it reads a little oddly.

  3. s.n.singh says:

    strange when the summer is approaching.

  4. fergus,
    Well caught the turbulence of the rain driven by
    violent winds . Guess it is both physical and mental .
    nicely penned …..

  5. kusum says:

    Rain and wind to be taken figuratively, I suppose.
    ‘from a By times roaring…’ does not sound grammatically correct.
    Singular mixed up with plural.
    ‘a’ & ‘by’ could be replaced by ‘at’.
    ‘from at times roaring…..’

  6. Gion Gion says:

    spot on about “figuratively”.
    The grammar is correct as “a” is referring to “Violent wind”.
    The intervening lines are sub-clauses.

  7. kusum says:

    But it reads a bit oddly, to put in your own words.

  8. Vishvnand says:

    Rain drops came to life & felt as human
    In this profound depiction of elegant description
    Liked immensely

  9. Hitesh says:

    really nice to see your poems again after quite some time Sir

  10. rajdeep says:

    I am just going with the thoughts.
    And that’s what more required to be a poesy, nor grammar neither punctuation.
    I loved it Fergus
    Nicely penned

  11. purabi says:

    some kinda work…
    violent rain roared&howled within..
    liked it!

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