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The rain pounds the window
Slumps against the glass
Seeking shelter from a
By times roaring
By times howling
Violent wind
© Copyright Fergus Carty 2013
Why leave a sentence incomplete.
Seeking shelter from a …………….
Did not like the poem much.
Apurva,
the sentence is not incomplete. I have used line endings as informal punctuations.
Sorry is it reads a little oddly.
Fergus
strange when the summer is approaching.
S.N.
yes approaching at its leisure.
The violent rain storm prompted this poem,
Fergus
fergus,
Well caught the turbulence of the rain driven by
violent winds . Guess it is both physical and mental .
nicely penned …..
sarala
Sarala,
yes, physical and mental.
Dark thoughts amidst the turbulence,
Fergus
Rain and wind to be taken figuratively, I suppose.
‘from a By times roaring…’ does not sound grammatically correct.
Singular mixed up with plural.
‘a’ & ‘by’ could be replaced by ‘at’.
‘from at times roaring…..’
Kusum
Kusum,
spot on about “figuratively”.
The grammar is correct as “a” is referring to “Violent wind”.
The intervening lines are sub-clauses.
Fergus
But it reads a bit oddly, to put in your own words.
Kusum
Rain drops came to life & felt as human
In this profound depiction of elegant description
Liked immensely
Kudos
really nice to see your poems again after quite some time Sir
😀
I am just going with the thoughts.
And that’s what more required to be a poesy, nor grammar neither punctuation.
I loved it Fergus
Nicely penned
some kinda work…
violent rain roared&howled within..
liked it!